The story of - (Our Insomniacs!)

Started by Juwayyid, March 21, 2013, 01:54:04 PM

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Juwayyid

Alright guys, in order to keep us a bit more focused and organized, we will post our ideas and thoughts about out "story of" series here, so we don't lose anything of value!

So we all know KURIZMAAH has his story done and out.  His story incorporates the Sif and Bandit Duo, and ends with him entering a forest of zombies where he will, in a future video, fine Jay and myself.

So remember, we want to tie all the stories together eventually, and we need different stories for each member.  We randomly selected Haze_Storm15 as the next member to get a story, but so far the awesome story we made up for him has been, well, turned down by Haze himself. 

So lets come up with a new story for Haze_storm15!  Make sure the story reflects his personality and actions and has tiny tie ins to other players stories!
Though not of this world, The Juwayyid finds human kind to be a tolerable enough species to hang around with.

wills20202

#1
Haze_Storm15 the story of Haze!


Juwayyid

Yes, well, we would need more to work off of than that Wills!
Though not of this world, The Juwayyid finds human kind to be a tolerable enough species to hang around with.

Jaysers

#3
I'm sitting here with my cup of tea after taking the most ridiculous test on Thursday. If there's any parts that seems strange or out of place, deal with my tiredness.


The Story Of... Haze_Storm15


[spoiler]Haze_storm15 was not always called what he is today. Before his unfortunate change, he used to be something else... Something great..

Those who still remember the days would remember the great name DaNeolous (DAN-EE-OL-US) Lyrion. Those who knew him simply called him "DanE-L" for short. Daneolous was the CEO of the highly profitable casino, a name nearly everyone was familiar with: "OroVida". He had everything. The looks, the charm, everything a man could ask for.

Everything was swell for him, that is until one fateful day.. His casino became near bankrupt. Rumors have it he was secretly funding a government sponsored project that had something to do with bananas. That rumor has been fiercely denied, though some people still had their doubts. As a last resort, he had funded a project that would've changed the very idea of science itself, hoping that it would bring back his casino fortune. Sadly, the project failed, and worse, the test subject escaped. Nothing would become well for him that day on..

DaNeolous, being the CEO of a wealthy casino, had ties -and debts- with some very dangerous men. When they heard of the misfortune that had come to DaNeolous, they immediately took advantage of the situation. Members of several gangs broke into DaNeolous' house, taking everything and throwing him out of his own house. DaNeolous, left with nothing but his wallet, became a broken soul..

He spent months at the local bar, trying to drink out his sorrows. Later, seeing how alcohol alone wouldn't take away the pain, he resorted to needles and substances. The substances allowed him to find false comfort, and soon joined his supplier in their mischievous endeavors. He soon then became the head of the gang. The gang, though small, would thrive and grow under his influence and command. People and nearby communities soon learned (and feared) the name "Manada Leon". DaNeolous abandoned his former name, which finally brought the end of his former legacy of DaNeolous Lyrion. He took the name "Haze", which was what the locals and FBI had titled him with because they could never find him, but always found his influence everywhere. To make the name seem more fitting, he added "Storm" to the end as a joke, but the addition of it showed the aggression of the Leonnes.

His ultimate goal, which he had planned for years, was to bring down the men who took his title, his wealth, and his dreams. He heard a rumor that the people he was after were trying to uncover his secretly funded project's location. Against what his people advised him, he set out alone to see if this rumor was true...
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The Story Of.... Jaysers   -   Work In Progress!

[spoiler]There is a legend that parents often tell their children before they go to bed. Often, they start like this..
"There once was a knight who saved all the lands of Insomnia. [/spoiler]
"To regret is to make an experience that of suffering. I do not regret the time spent, but rather wish it was spent on something else."

Juwayyid

Well, uh.. Hmmm, yes...


Wowza.  Haze, I always knew you were under appreciated!

So, I liked how his story started out.  I think it's a great introduction.  I'm not sure about the drug abuse though.  We will have to minecraft a bit of it and have him use potions instead of needles.

The story may end up being a bit hard to follow as we must keep in mind that most information must be displayed visually.  So there may be some tweaking needed.

I'll go through and re-read it when I get more time, but it's definitely something I'm interested in making and I think haze will be as well
Though not of this world, The Juwayyid finds human kind to be a tolerable enough species to hang around with.

Jaysers

Yeah my version is mainly nonvisual, more like a narrative story. But yeah I agree with your suggestions.
"To regret is to make an experience that of suffering. I do not regret the time spent, but rather wish it was spent on something else."

Juwayyid

So haze may be funding the science organization that hired bandit and sif?  Nice!  Haha
Though not of this world, The Juwayyid finds human kind to be a tolerable enough species to hang around with.

sifitis

This one is good, and if haze complains...then screw him, make it anyway. (We had to jail kuriz during HIS video, so this isnt too far off of that)

haze_storm15

This is and i quote "AMAZING"  i love the idea of that and we have to make banana video after mine cause it says
Quote from: Jaysers on March 22, 2013, 02:40:08 PM

Everything was swell for him, that is until one fateful day.. His casino became near bankrupt. Rumors have it he was secretly funding a government sponsored project that had something to do with bananas. That rumor has been fiercely denied, though some people still had their doubts. As a last resort, he had funded a project that would've changed the very idea of science itself, hoping that it would bring back his casino fortune. Sadly, the project failed, and worse, the test subject escaped. Nothing would become well for him that day on..

i like it though good job jayser

Jaysers

So I got started on The Story Of... Jay-Yid story. It's under the same post I have The Story Of... Haze_Storm in.

Remember: the story is still under Work in Progress!

EDIT: I forgot to mention I haven't started editing Haze's story yet with your guys' input. I'll get started on that soon.
"To regret is to make an experience that of suffering. I do not regret the time spent, but rather wish it was spent on something else."

Juwayyid

Well Jaysers, I'd say that story is quite exciting as it reads now.  It could be a good way to introduce myself as well.

Leaving the ending open, as we did with Kurizmaah, may feel unsatisfying, but remember that there will be multiple videos of our characters coming into contact with each other and continuing the story until the final, all come together video.

that, plus I think you said there is more to come.

Anyway, this is great Jay and again is really something that will be fun to make.  As soon as you started to explain how the noises on the dark path begin to fade away, I instantly knew to make the scene get silent, which you went on to explain anyway.  I think it will be quite cool and mystical, which I love!
Though not of this world, The Juwayyid finds human kind to be a tolerable enough species to hang around with.

Emperor_Quimby

Quote from: Jaysers on March 22, 2013, 02:40:08 PM
I'm sitting here with my cup of tea after taking the most ridiculous test on Thursday. If there's any parts that seems strange or out of place, deal with my tiredness.


Here's my idea for... The Story Of... Haze_Storm15


[spoiler]Haze_storm15 was not always called what he is today. Before his unfortunate change, he used to be something else... Something great..

Those who still remember the days would remember the great name DaNeolous (DAN-EE-OL-US) Lyrion. Those who knew him simply called him "DanE-L" for short. Daneolous was the CEO of the highly profitable casino, a name nearly everyone was familiar with: "OroVida". He had everything. The looks, the charm, everything a man could ask for.

Everything was swell for him, that is until one fateful day.. His casino became near bankrupt. Rumors have it he was secretly funding a government sponsored project that had something to do with bananas. That rumor has been fiercely denied, though some people still had their doubts. As a last resort, he had funded a project that would've changed the very idea of science itself, hoping that it would bring back his casino fortune. Sadly, the project failed, and worse, the test subject escaped. Nothing would become well for him that day on..

DaNeolous, being the CEO of a wealthy casino, had ties -and debts- with some very dangerous men. When they heard of the misfortune that had come to DaNeolous, they immediately took advantage of the situation. Members of several gangs broke into DaNeolous' house, taking everything and throwing him out of his own house. DaNeolous, left with nothing but his wallet, became a broken soul..

He spent months at the local bar, trying to drink out his sorrows. Later, seeing how alcohol alone wouldn't take away the pain, he resorted to needles and substances. The substances allowed him to find false comfort, and soon joined his supplier in their mischievous endeavors. He soon then became the head of the gang. The gang, though small, would thrive and grow under his influence and command. People and nearby communities soon learned (and feared) the name "Manada Leon". DaNeolous abandoned his former name, which finally brought the end of his former legacy of DaNeolous Lyrion. He took the name "Haze", which was what the locals and FBI had titled him with because they could never find him, but always found his influence everywhere. To make the name seem more fitting, he added "Storm" to the end as a joke, but the addition of it showed the aggression of the Leonnes.

His ultimate goal, which he had planned for years, was to bring down the men who took his title, his wealth, and his dreams. He heard a rumor that the people he was after were trying to uncover his secretly funded project's location. Against what his people advised him, he set out alone to see if this rumor was true...
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The Story Of.... Jaysers/Juwayyid   -   Work In Progress!

a great war, to determine the fate of mankind...
Never ending, the pain and tolls of their mind...
Amidst the chaos, a defender shall rise...
Against the corruption and all the lies...
One final battle, to determine it all...
Rise defender, you must answer the call...

EDIT: 3/23-24/13
So this is the continuation of The Story Of.. Jaysers and Juwayyid. Throughout the story, I'll be adding small footnotes/things that go through my mind while I'm making the story. As usual, these stories are always open to critiques and suggestions.

Part One: Juwayyid's Journey

[spoiler]Since he was a child, Juwayyid had a knack for exploration. Everyday he would leave his father's house to explore the forest near his backyard. When he returns, he always came back with strange but interesting items. It was soon that he found out that he had a unique talent for discovering lost and hidden things of the world. Word spread quickly and soon, an illusive company hired him to explore what they described as "ruins filled with secrets of the world".
(intro could use a little work. the intro might not be important to the film itself, but I like to add a little background story :P)

Juwayyid set off to the location the company described. When he arrived and looked at his map, he was a tad confused. His location and surroundings weren't on the map he always carried with him. He looked around, and noticed there was a small chest, in it containing a small letter and a limited map.
The note read the following (the note part, no doubt, will need editing. Up to you guys for what it should read)
"Hullo Mr. Juwayyid. No doubt you have noticed that this location is strange.
We have provided you with a limited map in assisting you to start your journey.
We bid you good luck, and may we prosper from your discoveries.
Your Funder."
Juwayyid picked up the map and was somewhat comforted that it contained his immediate surrounding. Following his sense of luck, he headed east.

He soon came across a dense forest. It was like any other forest and it reminded him of his childhood, when he would explore his family's forest. He soon came across a few natural clearings, and pondered for a bit, thinking of which path to take. Most of the paths led to similar surroundings, except for a particular path. Usually he would avoid such darker paths, but he felt as if he was being called towards it. When he took the path, the birds stopped singing. A few more meters have passed, and he noticed there weren't much wildlife in his surroundings.(So here, if this part is added to the film, you could have mild bird sound effects in the background whilest this scene is happening, and maybe some pigs in the background. Then, when Juwayyid changes into the new path, no bird sounds can be heard, as well as no animals being seen nearby) When he came across a clearing, it was dark. Yet this darkness had an unusual aura of peacefulness. Soon the soft pitter-patter of rain was upon him, which turned into a monsoon. Usually he doesn't mind the rain, but Juwayyid found this new arriving rain to feel somewhat threatening. He decided he would continue on his trek for a little while longer before he would start creating a temporary shelter.

Part Two: Discovery

The rain made it difficult to see in the forest, which was already hard to see through due to thick leaves in his way. He stopped to recover a bit after trekking for two hours. He took out his new map and tried to get a sense of his bearing. To his dismay, he couldn't find out where he was. All he knew was he headed eastwards, before he changed path. Instead of worrying, he decided to follow his instinct he used for years. But not to go back the way he came, but forward, towards the unknown. He got up, breathed in deep, and started exploring once again. He took three confident steps, before the ground underneath him caved in. He grunted in pain as he landed on his foot, mildly spraining it. To his surprise, the cave-in wasn't all that deep. It was only around converting into block measurements) 4-5 blocks high. When he looked inside, however, he found a pathway that looked strangely like an entrance way. He climbed back out of the hole and looked above ground, towards the pathway, and found a small area that didn't look at all like a part of the forest. He felt satisfied. Not only did he find somewhere worth exploring, but also something like a temporary shelter.

After checking to see if the immediate surrounding was safe, Juwayyid rested in front of the entrance and lit a small fire. He ate and quenched his thirst. It was late in the evening, and the low sun made him slightly drowsy. Next thing he knew, he was asleep for a few hours. (The flashback where he explored his family's forest could occur here, like a memory replayed in a dream) He was awoken by a loud thunder and saw that the rain turned into a fierce thunderstorm. The forest did what it could to provide him cover, but the rain always managed to slip by, as if the forest and the weather were at war. Juwayyid quickly gathers his things, took a deep breath, and walked inside the mysterious structure.

Part Three: The Exploration/Jay's appearance

Juwayyid lit his torch, and peered inside the dark veil. After walking a bit, the area around him lit up dimly, revealing a two statues that seemed like they were guarding a small fountain between them. There was only one doorway but the area was quite spacious. (The cave/area could be a bit large, with the fountain in the middle) The door itself was larger than usual doors, built like it could fit two people through.
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The Story Of... Jay-yid is still under Work In Progress!

.... So yeah, I'm a bit brain-dead at the moment so I'll work on this later.

Comments? Critiques? Complaints?

If you see anything you want to edit/revise/remove/etc. etc. etc, feel free to do so.

EDIT- Ok uhh.. I don't know why, but I made everyone mentioned meet at the forest.. Not sure if this was contradicting your idea for the stories Juwayyid but... Yeah, that's what was going through my mind while I was making these stories.

No wonder why I get 12 in English reading, jesus my eyes hurts!
But yeah I too like it, and it totally changes Haze from a white trash member to a casino owner.

Jaysers

So nearly an hour later after I started again, I updated my post containing the story. right now, i'm too tired to explain everything.. Must... Sleep...
"To regret is to make an experience that of suffering. I do not regret the time spent, but rather wish it was spent on something else."